Get rid of word “to be”! No passive voice!

The bibliography only received B-. Focus on getting rid of word “to be”!!!!! Please try your best to write an “A” audio tour! Look forward to your excellent work!

Please choose several audio tours that is at least 4 minutes long on this website to listen to. The audio tour is different from the description, analysis,
interpretation and judgment.
MOMA Audio Tours link:
http://www.moma.org/explore/multimedia/audios/375/audios-all
Feldman’s Method of Art Criticism

An “A” Audio tour will
• Employ a clear, moderately paced, audible, and appropriately enthusiastic voice
• Include the title of the work, artist’s name, and date composed
• Engage the listener with a riveting opening and a strong closing
• Include interesting and relevant historical and biographical information without losing focus on work
• Have a perfect balance of background information and analysis
• Describe only in order to point out subtle aspects, artistic elements and principles, and analysis and interpretation of the work
• Get the listener to look at the artwork throughout (using pointer words, questions, etc.)
• Zoom in to important aspects and artistic elements of the work
• Support interpretation with textual evidence
• Demonstrate a thorough understanding of the audio tour genre, its audience, circumstance, and purpose
• Have clear and effective transitions and be well organized
• Use succinct and precise language
• Use minimal, if any, forms of the verb “to be”; use active voice throughout
• Will not use first person
• Talk about the work in present tense
• Cite direct quotations and any obscure information within the prose
• Use MLA style of documentation and include a works cited page
• Stay within the 4-5 minute limit

The audio tour should include but not limited to the following:
Artist, time, history.
objective description of some parts
Main focus of the painting
Ask question and then answer to make it sounds like a story
Compare to other paintings at the same period
Talk about title
Divide the painting into 4 parts
Talk about the body language of figures in the painting to help understand what they are doing
Use secondary resources
Focus on why and how
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